Halloween Kills CHAPER ONE " Trick or Treat"

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It was Halloween night and kids were up and down the street getting candy and she took my little sisters out to get candy. 

  We where out for about a hour and a half when my sister Alex pointed out a clown walking behind us for a while so she looked back and she didn't see anybody but "Lex there's nobody there so we'll finish up at like 5 more houses and go back home ok?" she nodded and so did my other sister.

  we finally got to the last house that looked creepy but she let the girls go and get some candies it said "TAKE ONE PLEASE" so she went up and made sure the girls only took one and she saw something out the corner of my eye and she looked and it was a man with a creepy yet detailed clown outfit on and she yelled nice outfit but there was no reply so she took the girls and went home. 

  When we got there she made sure the girls got  shower and cover and where comfortable on the couch cause we were gonna watch some scary movies together she made sure the doors and windows were locked and she made some popcorn after she showered and changed into my pj's and she played the movies but into the 3rd movie the girls where asleep and isheheard a knock at the door and it about 2am about now and she look threw the peep-hole and nobody was there. so she went to get some water and my phone rang and she went to grab it ad hen she saw it said it was a blocked number so she answered it and she put it to my ear and said "hello?....". 

  she heard a mans voice say "trick or treat..." and laughter so she dropped my phone, ran an woke up the girl and hid them under my bed in my room with a knife and she heard a crash sound from upstairs and she grabbed a bat and slowly walked up the stairs and saw the same clown from earlier and he was holding a bloody knife and had a twisted smile on his face and ran twards me she ran and ran but he caught me by my hair pulled me close and slit her neck. 

  The clown droped her onto the ground and watched the light in her eyes go out and went on to carve "TRICK OR TREAT?!" on her stomach and he left without a trace...

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daniiiwasheere
Jul 8, 2022 · 16 views

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

it's posteddd it's not the best but i like it

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

noted

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

and this is not about me and its not my real name

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

thxxxx

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

take however much time you want

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

yess ima post it rn sooo can u give me 5 mins or more?

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

that is entirely up to you, its your story, if you're comfortable posting it, go for it

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

and i have a sad story if u or anybody wants me to post it

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

yeaaaa

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

its in your name :) do songs help you generate ideas for your story?

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

i keep playing the same song over and over

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

true and you right im not a idiot im a QUEEN!

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

I'm still learning rules and I've been writing for years.

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

all. (sorry, i forgot what i was writing and pre commented)

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

nah, you're not an idiot. writing is hard. there's so many rules , some that can be broken depending on style and some that can't. that's

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

thank u im just a idiot and im so damn lazy ima use these tis tomorrow for the next chapterrrr

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

there's a lot of run on sentences and the passage is very direct in what the characters are doing. you dont want the reader to suspect whats coming either. you want to write your sentences not like a youre talking to someone about your day (unless that's what a character is actually doing) you want to be nore descriptive, use nore similies and metaphors, deacribe the area they're at, if and when its important. like the creepy house: the looming giant of wood and stone imposed an otherworldly shadow over them as they crept up the the ancient steps "TAKE ONE" the ghostly house warned, chills slivering down the girls tiny spines, for example.

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

give me suggestions pleaseeee

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

do it

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

i do! i would make some suggestions but I don't want to unintentionally offend you

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daniiiwasheereJul 8, 2022

do u like it???

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pARANOIApAMJul 8, 2022

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